Hey Saie! Your analysis of your first Prose Passage was VERY well-written. It was clear and to the point, especially how you showed how Alice Walker portrayed Celie as “an uneducated woman with a heart of hold” through her small-town dialect, to how the epistolary (I love that word) form of the prose passage really unraveled the true persona of Celie, and her repressed emotions. I do think you could have elaborated a bit more the second paragraph, by explaining what repressed emotions Celie was feeling, BEFORE you showed how the epistolary form made those emotions come to the surface and be revealed to the reader/Celie. Also, with your third paragraph – which according to your thesis should have addressed diction and syntax – didn’t really address diction nor syntax, but rather the significance of the names people are called to convey gender roles in the “The Color Purple,” which I think is powerful. So I would suggest to either change your thesis, or tie in diction and syntax to the gender roles portrayed in “The Color Purple,” and how that then shows the emotions Celie is repressing. Lastly, thanks for an amazing and engaging presentation! You spoke very well, and I really enjoyed it!
So I have to say, I totally didn’t think there was actually spinach in your cookies until someone pointed it out. They really just tasted like ordinary chocolate-chip cookies, albeit with a mildly salty taste. But hey, that just means they were delicious, and not to mention, a good partial serving of spinach! You did a wonderful job on your presentation as well. I loved the way you revolved the theme around the color purple, representing the title of the book. As Ms. Wilson remarked somewhere, you should focus on the author’s style as a whole, such as in her other works of literature, since it would provide a more holistic view on the author’s writing for the AP Exam.
In your first close reading essay, you did a nice job of incorporating the stylistic devices Alice Walker used in expressing the themes of her story—dialect, epistolary form, and the diction and syntax. However, I think you could have done a better job in supporting your points. You could have used more textual evidence from your prose passage to back up your claims and arguments, which I didn’t see much of when I read through your essay. Your conclusion could have also been more…conclusive? It felt a lot like a summary of the introduction, and didn’t quite hit home the point you were trying to prove. But don’t fret! Everyone always has room for improvement! Great job!
Hey Saie! Your analysis of your first Prose Passage was VERY well-written. It was clear and to the point, especially how you showed how Alice Walker portrayed Celie as “an uneducated woman with a heart of hold” through her small-town dialect, to how the epistolary (I love that word) form of the prose passage really unraveled the true persona of Celie, and her repressed emotions. I do think you could have elaborated a bit more the second paragraph, by explaining what repressed emotions Celie was feeling, BEFORE you showed how the epistolary form made those emotions come to the surface and be revealed to the reader/Celie.
ReplyDeleteAlso, with your third paragraph – which according to your thesis should have addressed diction and syntax – didn’t really address diction nor syntax, but rather the significance of the names people are called to convey gender roles in the “The Color Purple,” which I think is powerful. So I would suggest to either change your thesis, or tie in diction and syntax to the gender roles portrayed in “The Color Purple,” and how that then shows the emotions Celie is repressing.
Lastly, thanks for an amazing and engaging presentation! You spoke very well, and I really enjoyed it!
So I have to say, I totally didn’t think there was actually spinach in your cookies until someone pointed it out. They really just tasted like ordinary chocolate-chip cookies, albeit with a mildly salty taste. But hey, that just means they were delicious, and not to mention, a good partial serving of spinach! You did a wonderful job on your presentation as well. I loved the way you revolved the theme around the color purple, representing the title of the book. As Ms. Wilson remarked somewhere, you should focus on the author’s style as a whole, such as in her other works of literature, since it would provide a more holistic view on the author’s writing for the AP Exam.
ReplyDeleteIn your first close reading essay, you did a nice job of incorporating the stylistic devices Alice Walker used in expressing the themes of her story—dialect, epistolary form, and the diction and syntax. However, I think you could have done a better job in supporting your points. You could have used more textual evidence from your prose passage to back up your claims and arguments, which I didn’t see much of when I read through your essay. Your conclusion could have also been more…conclusive? It felt a lot like a summary of the introduction, and didn’t quite hit home the point you were trying to prove. But don’t fret! Everyone always has room for improvement! Great job!